sokool15

Hi, there. :smt006 Glad to see me? :wink: I liked this chapter. I want to tell you that I absolutely adore the game you've invented, and envy it absolutely. It ...

This is an intriguing stimulated our interest and presented intrigue without giving away what the plot line was actually going to be, which is a mistake of a lot of ...

Hmmm...this is pretty good! The total lack of dialogue made it just a tiny bit difficult to get through, but then, if there's only one character in the story so ...

Interesting...very interesting! Well, congrats on hooking me into it. It's short, even for a prologue, but I guess that's okay. It doesn't need to be long to say what you ...

Oooooh, interesting! I think I'll keep reading this. Intriguing, exciting, and well done on keeping and stirring the reader's interest. It started well, with beautiful descriptions, and then abruptly

This is good! I haven't read the rest of the story, but perhaps I will, now. Your writing style flowed very well, and was easy to read. Your dialogue was ...

DUDE! NOOOOOO!!! Don't stop! *whimpers* :P That would be like a sign, you're giving up! I mean, I can crit if you want, but I've already read it... Anyway, why ...

Oh, wow....lol, that was amazing. *squints in jealousy at your writing style* I agree with what the other critiquers said...when you've got Snoink and Claudette on the job, what is ...

I think what you need to do is separate the flashbacks a was somewhat confusing, but easily fixed, I think. You had the present, then a flashback, then the present ...

OOh, I really liked this! Good was an intriguing story. You should continue this... One thing: I don't remember what I thought like when I was ten, but I don't ...

Awww...short and sweet, just how I like it! I loved your descriptions of the many writers (including myself) just concentrate on their characters, but you did a very good job ...

Er...shouldn't this be in the fanfiction section? I didn't really read it, but from what I saw, I agree with what the others said...interesting idea, but hard to read it ...

Wow, I liked this! It was crazy...kind of weird, but cool! I enjoyed it. “Why are you talking so meanly?” I didn't like that. Is 'meanly' even a word? If ...

HA! I actually liked this, although I don't agree with the sentiment. I agree with the others...good but could be better. One word: passing fugitive moments where you think Correct ...

I like what you've done was enjoyable, but I agree with what the others said. I didnt' read the original, but I imagine it's better now. I agree that it's ...