sokool15

Hmmm... I have to say this is not my favorite tone for a poem - opening with a question, talking directly to the reader and yet through the rest of ...

Hi there! I haven't been to this site for a while so I apologize in advance if I'm behind the times. I have to say that overall I really enjoyed ...

This is a scene from American Psycho... is it right to pass this off as your own work? The movie came out before this was written... you had to have ...

First of all... You're an excellent writer, and you did most of your grammatical stuff right, your word choice was good, your characterization was complete. The problem wasn't your writing, ...

Hey! I don't think anybody's going to be tearing this apart, love. Great, great story. You've really drawn the reader into complete sympathy with the main character. Beautiful little piece. ...

Hey there, love I do like the overall tone of your story - it's a good writing style, light, easy to read. Check out the tips on spacing above, though. ...

I do agree with the previous critiquer in that the love is happening too fast. (Note: to be redundant, the smell thing still confuses me.) In the first two chapters ...

I like it - very good continuation from the first chapter. I'm still confused as to what the main character is. I'm probably stupid and skipped over some critical information ...

Hey! First of all I just want to express how awesome your story is. I don't have much to say - all the other critiquers pretty much raked it up. ...

Hellooooo! Sorry it took me so shamefully long. I got finished with a test and got out early from classes, so I decided to spend my free time with YOU! ...

Hey, there, Bick (still thinking about your real name. Pm soon with results) So, this was really interesting. If you were trying to create a dramatic change between Alice's voice ...

How could you do this? How could you defile the most beloved and HOT vampire of our times? And killing off Bella was unforgiveable, as well as irreverent. In this... ...

Okay, everybody else has already critiqued the small bits. I thought there was some awkwardness but your writing style wasn't bad at all. I have one major problem with the ...

Hey there! I'm soooo glad I found this - you should have told me you'd posted it! (pm is on the way, just so you know.) First of all - ...

Hey there! Thanks for the pm - could you pm me with the next one too? I really like these stories, but when you don't post for awhile I forget ...