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I woke up screaming, with tears running down my face. Ever since that day, I have been getting nightmares [no comma needed] about it. It’s the same thing everyday . ...

Hi there :D Alright, if I'm completely honest, I didn't particularly enjoy this. There was nothing which particularly pulled me into the story. I found the last two paragraphs picked ...

Hey there! Unfortunately I don't have time for a very in depth critique, which is actually alright since there wasn't much here to critique really :D I thought this was ...

Hello there :D Alright so I read through this and really enjoyed it and then realised that there were two parts which go before it and unfortunatly I don't have ...

Hey there! Alright first there were just one two tiny nit-picks... The street lights tint the whole scene a dull orange, and the scene looks surreal Think about maybe getting ...

I loved it! As always I don't have anything constructive to say because I'm not really a poet :( but I thought I would let you know that I read ...

Hello! I do agree that you should expand on this slightly. I found it very interesting as it is and it definatly made me think, but I also think that ...

Hello there! I edited a few things as i went through if that's okay! :D Chapter one: He was working through college You know why I’m sending you there, right ...

Hi! I was wondering if you were just posting this on it's own or if it was the opening to something much longer? If it's just on it's own then ...

With every new piece I read by you, I just love your writing more and more! The subject matter of this is so original and your ending was just perfect. ...

Love, love, love it! :D as always haha It reminded me very much of 'Before you were mine' by Carol Anne Duffy (stanza 3) and also 'Homecoming' by Simon Armitage. ...

Hello :D lilymoore seems to have covered most of what I was going to say in terms of what you've actually written so I'll focus more on the ideas if ...

I found these very intriguing, mainly because I don't fully understand the first two- but in this case I think it can work as a positive thing. They have a ...

Wow...I really loved this. It seemed to me that this poem is about trying to make people into something they are not? Or trying to make yourself fit into what ...

Hello! Okay, well firstly this really should be rated for language and the like so if you could please put a rating on it :D I liked the overall concept ...