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hey AudreyHearts! This was absolutely adorable!! It serves it's purpose, cute little love story. Typical twist with the friends liking the same guy. The only thing I must point out ...

hey Pretty Crazy, This was very random, to say the least. I think because it was so random, that your story was all over the place. I was very confused ...

hey trhwrites! I haven't read your previous chapter in this series, so if I point out anything you have already talked about in the last chapter, please disregard. Despite being ...

hey ilovemyboys! This was very cute(; but I do have a few suggestions to take this piece and make it even cuter! First of all, I was in love with ...

hello xangeleighfshox! You've got the works of a story going with this, but you should try to draw the reader in and describe "this guy" more. Yes he may be ...

Hello CardDragon! I'm just cautioning you, I'm not one to write lyrics or poetry, so essentially I'm not the best reviewer. But I'm gonna give it a try! I'm not ...

Hello Attolia! Yes, this did make me laugh, but I wasn't laughing at you! lol, I thought this was cute, so much poetry is depressing and intense, but this was ...

Hey Smexaykk01! I agree with blackbird12, I think your piece is very rushed. I'm guessing you wrote this while you were upset with your dad for yelling at you (believe ...

Hello blackbird12! This is an excellent story. Very well written, I really don't have much to say about the grammar, except for the fact that sometimes I didn't understand what ...

Hey LittlePrincess! This is my second time reviewing one of your chapters for My Falling Sun and it always is interesting everytime. I see that the plot has thickened even ...

Hello Nike! I know this is part of a series, so I don't expect to understand much about the characters and what they are about because I did not read ...

Hello Lumierre! I love this poem! I think it's beautifully written, I don't recommend changing it in the least bit. I love the struggle there is between God and Lucifer! ...

Hello Naydy! Well, I think you definately have some grammar to look at. This story was filled with little things I could nitpick on, but I'll only include a few: ...

Hello Flit! I have to say, this was a refreshing love story. What I mean is that this story was just so adorable! With all the childhood aspects and the ...

Hello winterbaby! When I started reading this, when I saw Holden Caulfield, I immediately knew he was from a book. I believe it's Catcher In The Rye? I'm not sure, ...