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Take with salt; mind with care. The window is cold with tropical rain. The leaves of palm trees are scratching at its glass. Replace "its" with "the." The window was ...

First stanza, first thing I noticed: When you removed "of you," you also lost the little rhyme between "blue" and "you." I miss it. I liked it. Take with salt; ...

I enjoyed reading, but haven't really much to say in typical review. This poem stands on its own. It is neither a skeleton, nor a full-bodied read. It is a ...

Excuse me, but there is no revision to be done here. I could pick at this as finely as I liked. I could make subjective suggestions and force my weak ...

Mind the edges; take with salt. That perplexing blue Knocks the air out of you just by looking Makes you breathe in Salt foams Feeling grand yet shrunken Watching Hearing ...

Mind the edges; take with salt. First impression: I am deeply intrigued. Your diction and style are both excellent. The story is, on its own, fascinating. Your writing is just ...

Take with salt; mind with care. I am sincerely looking forward to this review. :) I stood, waiting, hoping you'd remember me, Always off in the distance, I tried to ...

Take with salt; mind with care. Lonliness a strange feeling i dont know with what im dealing Apart from obvious grammatical errors (im->I'm, loneliness needs an 'e', so forth), this ...

Mind the edges; take with salt. Mmh. All the boldness. That formatting... I apologize, but I find it grotesque. I like the poem better in normal weight font. Happiness Warms ...

Mind the edges; take with salt. First of all, this is an excellently executed poem - meaning it actually satisfies the requirements of being poetic: somewhat beautiful, somewhat indirect. I ...

Take with salt; mind with care. I'm at this line, Andrea. "'Oh, alright. I’ll just go get dressed. What do I need to bring with me?' she asked, finishing her ...

Mind the edges; take with salt. This is an exceptional, and old, theme. I appreciate your attempt at its retelling. However, to semantics, I raise a few issues. Two hundred ...

Take with salt. Mind with care. The day began with the rising sun, and the son rose This is a little redundant. The sun is rising; the sun rose. I ...

Well, I don't think I got here in time. :) But I'm here, and I think that is what counts. Take with salt; mind with care. Don't be offended if ...

I do appreciate the story you are working on. And I appreciate that you are seeking insight from others. You already, however, have reviews. And capable, somewhat lengthy ones. I ...