skjold

here's a review on just grammer bolded and the in italics is the correction But since those glorious years, all is changed. A poverty but little above the level of ...

very good i thought here's a quick sum up of what i think you used very good description the characters are well defined, even if they are based off of ...

heres a short review for the beggining you said that he was unconscious. how can he still have a bloody wound if he was unconscious. you should write how long ...

ya i have to agree with sister nebraska. you don't want to have redundancy, it can make a story become boring when you use one word too many times. you ...

hi fairly good story i thought you described the characters well if you ask me the name Jyuna became a little irksome to kep trying to pronounce in my head. ...

this sentence is a wee bit wierd Elves love to say I’m a very beautiful elf I’m tall and slender with very fair skin, and very long black hair add ...

heres the answers to your many queries Has your number increased since first being prescribed these lenses? yes Have you been able to naturally cure your number? nope Do you ...

fairly good Maybe it was a long time since she last felt the sun. That thought in her mind, Lily tried to absorb as much of it as possible. this ...

the problem with stories like this is that its all been done before dragons and such what you need to do is describe more, make the setting and characters different ...