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I really like it! I've always thought that you were the best when it came to dialogue, and you did not disappoint! Fen sounds cute. Anyhoo I have some criticisms. ...

This is really interesting. I wasn't expecting Yen to be at all maternal, then again it makes sense that Em would feel that way after hearing that her mother was ...

Exciting! I love the twist, you're keeping me on my toes! I have a couple of nitpicky things to point out. Both of our breaths came too heavy and too ...

Intriguing! I really enjoyed your writing style, and the imagery was well done. I have a few notes if that's alright. There were a few areas with unnecessary repetition that ...

Hello! I really like how this is going so far. Rachel is an intriguing character, and I can't wait to hear more about her! Here are some suggestions and notes ...

Here's something that no one else seemed to point out: there were several occasions where, despite the story being in first person, the narrator knew more than he should have ...

Hello! I've just made an account and you are my favorite author that I've come across yet. I am interested in your story so far, though I do have a ...