silented1

Thank you. That was quite a review.

Thank you.

Thank you!

You're welcome. I am glad it agreed with you. I didn't read it as gasping. I may give it another go and try to read the whole thing in chunks ...

You're welcome. I am glad it agreed with you. I didn't read it as gasping. I may give it another go and try to read the whole thing in chunks ...

This poem is fantastic. Can you PM me a copy of this poem? I want to keep it for myself. What's the poem a week prompt? Can you link me?

Sorry about that last part, something went weird on me. My bad.

Okay, well, what you just elaborated didn't exist in your poem and that's what exist to you. I don't see it. Thanks for deleting my comments.

The more you defend yourself, the less you learn.

bump? =[

bump

I didn't read it, but just by looking at the amount of words between your repeated phrases tells me they are too repetitive. When you repeat something, try to build ...

His tongue is shrivled and burned from enjoying too much sour candy. When he was a kid, his dad owned a convienent store, and one day while he gorged himself ...

"Open your eyes, or we will open them for you." This doesn't match. Forceful people in a world where everything is just happening to you, and you reacting. I don't ...

I think you should switch the title with the description.