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Alright, so I wrote some more and this is what I got. There might still be a lot of grammar mistakes because I'm not so good at catching those, but ...

mizz-iceberg, kailamarie, Thanks for your reviews. I hadn't realized that I had so many typos! I'm definitely writing more, though!

Wow. If there were more I'd definitley read on! The tense does shift, and personally, for a prologue that appears should happen in the past it should be past tense.

Nice story. It's a little confusing and there are some typos, but all that's fixable. Towards the top, you say "The assassin docked the arrow...", and the proper word is ...

Wow. That was really good. Very detailed. A lot of stories written in a sparse, sort of modern, I guess, style tend to come of as generic, but not this!

Wow. You really get chilled when you read this. The last stanza doesn't really end. It would be better if it had a definite finish, I think. But, good job!