shadowraiki

Hi, this was a great story. However, I'm unsure how the title fits with the actual story itself. Here are a few things I noticed. She gasped and hit her ...

Seeing as how most of the grammar and spelling has been corrected, I'll give my general impression on the story. First, love is nothing to be embarrassed about. All of ...

It was an interesting read. A person with their best friends on a plane ride. A thing I noticed was that your usage of tenses gets wierd at some points. ...

God, that is so catchy. I could repeat that over and over and over again. The first stanza is a bit puzzling (only clear if you read spoiler). I know ...

I think I lost some IQ points there X.X. That was by far one of the most random things I have ever read. While it was an interesting read (had ...

Though everyone has said it already, I'll say it again: just watch the commas. I thought it was great that Adylyn was Ollie's step-sister. From the first section, I thought ...

Overall, there was nothing to majorly wrong. However I did notice a few things: A generation crippled and stagnated, with the inability to accommodate new concepts and to find new ...

Well that was brutal. Good thing I've seen and read a lot worse. Albeit it was strong, but don't let that get you down. Not calling anyone weak stomached or ...

Wow, that's pretty funny! An ordinary person switching phones with a secret agent. Totally caught me off guard. I thought it was going to be something like, "Uh... so I'm ...

This story is very good, but there are a few questions that a left open: -- Is Elliot actually a fish? I'm assuming he is a person, but he is ...

No offense, but the prologue feels like a long rambling session to me. While I do get what you're going for, I agree with IcyFlame that the first paragraph is ...

Ah, so we finally learn who Rael actually is. Again, commas are an issue. However I will be blunt on this Chapter. I am largely confused by what happened. As ...

Four to six hours? This would take me days, if not weeks to make. I would have no patience and everytime I messed up, I would scream in frustration. This ...

Wow, my heart was actually beating harder and harder as I read in anticipation. And no it wasn't the music I was listening too either. That was an amazing piece ...

That was actually kind of sad. Excuse me while I refresh my supply of salt (hehehe). The conflict is a bit hard to distinguish until the very end. At first, ...