shadepelt

I just want to thank you all so much. It's great to hear what you have to say, both positive and negative, and Demoness, I'll look into that order. Thank ...

I want to thank you all for your comments, they are extremely helpful and I seriously consider all of them. I feel like poetry is something that is often revisited ...

I think this is a really great poem, I really think I understood it. We all feel fear, and I think you do a great job of portraying it. I ...

please critique, I need advice!

Maybe you weren't paying attention, because it was like your hands were just acting for your mind. That happens to me and I end up spelling: "Viy went ott he ...

I began walking faster, making the circle a bit wider. I crouched down, almost like a tiger hunting her prey, and flew upwards, still circling. “Not fair! Harrison can’t fly.” ...

I'm going to make a new post for this...everything I have added recently will be on it, and it will be called Broken Wings-Part Two

I didn't see much wrong with it, and I thought it was great! You didn't just say things like "this is blaze, this is onyx, blahblahblah," your work was very ...

Thanks for everyone's tips. I have added a ton, and I hope now there is more action, and that it's a bit more informative and descriptive. I've tried to follow ...

it's incredible. you better post 2/2 or I will set my attack kittens on you! ;)

these are really great lyrics! they are amazing, and I can just imagine them to some celtic beat. There is nothing to critique about!

Flemzo, added a title, it's not very good, but I wanted to write some more. Also, your questions will be answered in my added parts later.

i really love this poem, it very well may be the best piece of poetry I have ever read! It is sweet and fun. I read on your profile that ...

Thanks for all your help. Hopeful_Youth, I describe where the train is taking her later in the story, which I edited and added to. Here is the revised beginning. Stupid ...

Thanks for your comments! i am really glad that some people think I can write! sorry about the character description, I put that in the beginning because when I first ...