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Re: Intertwined Chapter 6
Hi, I'm reviewing your work for Review Day. I haven't been following your series, so I am entering this as if I were a potential book buyer at a store. ...
Jan 27, 2013 -
Re: Set in Stone Chapter 2
Hi, I'm reviewing your story for Review Day. YWS Formatting: I don't know if you intentionally wrote your story in this manner, or if YWS managed to break it, but ...
Jan 27, 2013 -
Re: Historical Background + Chapter I (Updated 27/1)
Hi, I'm reviewing your work for Review Day. If you have any questions or clarifications are needed, please just send me a PM or post on my wall. Here are ...
Jan 27, 2013 -
Re: Bendspace: Chapter 2
I haven't been following this series and I know nothing, so accept my review for what it is; a random person picking up your piece and reading it. This should ...
Jan 27, 2013 -
Re: Enslaved in Lytias- Chapter Two
So it's review day. I haven't been following this series, and I know nothing about it. Imagine I am someone who happened to pick up your book in a bookshop ...
Jan 27, 2013 -
Re: Thoughts on Teen Writing Websites
"Teen Ink"? Forgot to substitute YWS there, eh? Whilst I agree with some of your points, a lot of them are just rants and not altogether true. Point One: I ...
Jan 25, 2013 -
Re: The Rholtaii Heritage - Chapter 8
Hi Polinka, sorry for the delayed review, been busy with nonYWS stuff :) But here I am, one of your three reviewers and on to your review. As you said ...
Jan 24, 2013 -
Re: The Kill Your Darlings and Stuff
Hi Puckerman, thanks for requesting a review here . I'm going to be honest, I had to read your article/essay about four times until I think I started to get ...
Jan 20, 2013 -
Re: Rye-lie
Hiya, you requested a review here . As Patch and Azrael have covered your story almost blow by blow, I'm going to be more general. Let's get started. Style: Your ...
Jan 20, 2013 -
Re: A short story that doesn't really have a point, written only to satisfy my pathetic needs for fluff and frowny Arthur.
Well, you requested a review here and I'm here to fulfil your request. So, here are my impressions: 1) This is a really useless story and this review will probably ...
Jan 19, 2013 -
Re: Searching for Security 3.1
As is my custom, I read as much as I would read during a curious glance. Here are my thoughts about the first few paragraphs: Dialogue: I feel as if ...
Jan 12, 2013 -
Re: Moving On Ch. 1 (continued...)
Hi, I'm jhoi and here are my thoughts about this chapter. Please keep in mind that I haven't read any of your other works. In a way this is a ...
Jan 12, 2013 -
Re: As I Go (Lily's Contest)
I sort of liked this, but at the same time really didn't. I felt that it was slightly clichéd and predictable, but the prose itself was commendable. One of my ...
Jan 12, 2013 -
Re: Cinder (A Cinderella Story)
I'm only going to review the first paragraph, as I don't have much time, but hopefully you'll find my criticism enlightening. Cinder was a beautiful girl. With hair like fire ...
Jan 12, 2013 -
Re: Hoping for a Miracle
Hi, I'm jhoi and I haven't reviewed in a while, but it's review day, so why not? Hayden was just only ten years old when his only brother was born. ...
Dec 30, 2012
