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First, this seemed like way too weird the way it is. I think it should go into the previous chapter. You'd have to extend that memory scene a bit more ...

Hey, here to review - apparently we're not going to Sizzlers :( Day thirty two, thought Lilly-Lynne as she marked a line on the wall. Thirty-two days she’d been in ...

Well, I kinda said I would read every chapter of Saving Lilly if you formatted everything correctly, and well, here I am. A lonesome balloon floated down steadily in the ...

Hey there, Things I can see straight away: 1) You need to format your story to suit the YWS website. There needs to be extra enter spaces between paragraphs to ...

Hi. I'm not going to review your work for the same reasons why everyone else is not reviewing your work. 1) You have flooded the forum with three consecutive chapters ...

Hey, I stumbled across your work :P I sit in the bottom of the shower And let the water clean me of your kisses. I like this first coupling, it's ...

Hey :) Initial reactions: 1) This woman is a weak person, hanging onto a relationship that the reader knows won't last. I'm hoping that this story goes beyond the cliché ...

Lol! What a fantastic little read :P I think we all have this fantasy, and reading this short story was quite satisfying to the little murderer in me. [/size][/size][/size][/size] Is ...

Just a quick heads up, no one will read your work if you flood a forum with your stuff, ESPECIALLY if your other poems prior to this have no comments. ...

This is entirely off-topic, but I've now come up with an incredible idea, and I had to share it with you, considering the fact that your work inspired me. I ...

First: You're perfect, straight facade "Your", and "façade". Second: Saying, "lyrics *copyrighted* could be one of the biggest turn-offs when browsing through the forums ever. Never ever say somethin

I'm not quite sure what to make of this. It's too short to really leave an impression on me. Even prefaces aren't normally this short. Prefaces are generally an out-take ...

Hi Makar. A few things I noticed straight away (considering the fact that this is in historical fiction etc) that you might want to do some research on. 1) The ...

Hey :) I quite liked this first chapter. It set the scene very well, and I'm interested in seeing how you pan out the story. There were a few things ...

I'll read this whole series and comment on every single chapter if you format the posts so that I can read them without straining my eyes. Go from this: “Welcome ...