sealegs

Thanks for reading Biffle and Classy!

Thanks Hannah! I agree with your title suggestion. Totally. Also, I've been inspire to expand the piece with more bird-like metaphors. Maybe you'll see the re-draft later.

Why? Because writing is habitual and if you want to get good at it, you must do it even when you don't particularly want to. In my opinion, it's more ...

Hum...let's see. I think the first three stanzas are the weakest. What if you started this poem with, "Travel to the west"?

I agree. Take out the comma. Replace the semi-colon with a period. Write a better last line. You fall? Not enough seeing there.

Is the 'you' in the second stanza the same 'you' as the third? It's unclear. Otherwise, you've done well. I love the science / poetry overlap.

Try writing about crying without the word 'cry'.