Published April 10, 2010
I was about to go to sleep a couple nights ago...when I started to write this in my journal. It's short, (because obviously it's a haiku) but I think it's funny and I hope you like it. 
Sometimes I forget,
to look where I am walking;
I fall on my face.
Thanks for reading! Review please???
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I agree. Take out the comma. Replace the semi-colon with a period. Write a better last line. You fall? Not enough seeing there.
Cute! I wish I could critique this, but I don't know really how to. So, that's all I have to say.
Keep on writing...haikus?
~KD
Haha *likes*
Haha! I did like this and it was funny! There's not really much to critique about it because it's so short but it is a haiku. I've written a few haikus, but not any of them funny like this. The only thing is maybe take out the comma. Hope this helped! pm for anything
winie*