scribblingquill

You are honest, which is awesome, I find myself beating around the bush a lot on here. This was fantastic. Nothing really I can criticize, I'm sure you've thought about ...

You were too lazy to make up characters? deary me! couple of things... you really mention people's hair too much in this. And the colour of their eyes. Its much ...

Oh this is cool! venom-tanks... that is the most powerful imagery! Love it. the starlight stuff is really evocative too, i like it. i agree with Snoink though, I don't ...

this is lovely... Writing and history- markings have been preoccupying me lately, this reminds me a little of my newest poem, except less self-indulgent! oh well. xD my favourite line ...

This is cool! Couple of nitpicky things then ill say more interesting stuff.. If he were english he would say "streets" not "blocks". As soon as he said that I ...

Wow! So much great imagery here, really your word choice is great, the image of the girl in the sunflower fields was lovely- could really picture her. Dialogue was real ...

I think that the dialogue with “You put cream in my tea” he tells me is a little clumsy- you could try changing it to something like "Cream? in my ...

Wow, I like this! I think this is the weakest stanza: My heart is heavy, With the burden of regret, Regret for the things I've done, That you will never ...

this is very intriguing, and pretty well written, but what is it?! Is it the intro to a story, or is this meant to be it? The only thing I ...

this is gorgeous. i love "Fun won’t hack it anymore. You’ll let me down so gently, so, so kindly it’ll crack me in two." Beautiful. I think the last paragraph ...

I like the idea of this, and it is quite touching, but i find it to be pretty simple. The only technique i can pick out is repetition, and I'd ...

haha this is really good! its really funny, i love how its all very young sounding, and her trying to be Mature. Its hilarious. The rabid animals and the gummy ...

This was really interesting, and I think the story concept is really cool. However, probably because you're trying to get all the details figured out for yourself it seems a ...

I like the gist of the story. I'd decided id read the first paragraph and if it didn't capture my attention i wouldnt continue. it did, and im glad. I ...

this is lovely and sad, the setting is beautiful, and it doesn't remind me of anything else I've read. There are only a couple of small things i would change: ...