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Being Edited!

Again, being edited.

Okay, same review key as last time: Red = comments Bold = words/sentences/phrases that I think you should add Let's see how you did. As the mind-numbing blackness of the ...

Thanks so much everyone!!! I'm glad you all enjoyed it. I'll definitley fix all of your suggestions, chapter 4 will be up soon, I promise. :-)

“This is stupid.” I huffed as I slammed the car door. I was in some part of Washington I’ve never heard of: Carrollton, and there in front of me was ...

No problem! If you want me to critique it after, just PM me when you have your revisions up :D

Thanks so much for all your comments! I'll definitley keep working on it :-) Samuel Garrison: It actually was one of the easier stories to write. I was sitting at ...

Hey everyone! Thanks for all the feedback. So I rewrote it and I was wondering if you all think it's anybetter, still needs work, or isn't quite there just yet. ...

Thanks everyone! I'll definitley switch the ending (great idea gryphonfledgling!) I like that kind of ending better. I probably will continue it but it has to be short so I'll ...

Yeah, I was just looking back over my writing (I wrote and finished this novel a while ago and I realized that the first chapter differs a lot on Adelaide's ...

Thanks so much everyone! I'll definitley check out your suggestions and fix the whole confusing pronoun thing. I'll introduce her name at the beginning so it isn't so confusing :D

No Problem. Also can you pm me when you put up your next chapter? :D

Thanks so much for all the help! bear and Jaliayh-- about the anger thing, she has to pretend that she doesn't associate with the common folk and must look down ...