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Esther: I love this! It sounds a lot like shel silverstein! I love the poem, it would make a great picture book. 1 thing: get rid of crud. It's just ...

Goodness! This is really really really really good! I love it! LOVE IT!!!! It is so abstract, but the words flow together. I love the feeling. It made me feel ...

Hi WW Sarebear here, thanks for reviewing my stuff, here's a review for you as requested! First of all, nitpicks: JoJo looked over at the table of the "Populars". if ...

'untalented' writer: Okay, first of all this is a really good start. I like the ideas. I also really like the way you phrase things. There are a few technical ...

Aliza, First of all, you need to leave spaces between paragraphs. It's different from in Word. I did that too the first time. You can't indent, you need to leave ...

Hi! I really really liked this story! I like the rhythmic feel of the saying. Such an old saying-one that every child hears many times, but used in an unusual ...

I guess I'm kind of slow on the uptake since you've already written another one. However, I still wanted to say that this is beautiful. It was extremely sad. I ...

Stomping into my bedroom was my mum saying, “Liam get up! Don’t make me come in here and turn that alarm of yours off again! And your dog needs food, ...

I really like it so far. I love your description of Ella; "I’d known Ella for as long as I could remember. I had only just been born when I ...

It's pretty good. A couple things: "Alex, are you close?" Mom rings into my ear. How can someone ring in someone else's ear? You might try to extend the beginning ...

Dark. Most definitely dark. Agreed. Sick, too. But amazing. It is short but completely effective. Elegant. I can't really find anything wrong with it. Just, you might give it a ...