sarahk1771

I like this and see where you are trying to go with this, but you need to make it longer maybe at more detail, near the end i actually thought ...

I'm not really a fan of poetry but this poem was amazing, the title just draws you in :) I like the first verse it has a ring to it ...

Broken glass is always an uncomfortable sight. It’s more scary when the broken glass is from the windows of a car. Broken glass is horrifying when it’s covered in blood ...

I never knew my parents. But I reckon they were real idiots! They got rid of me at the first chance they could. I was only a few years old ...

My parent's hadn't returned home when I got home. Huh this makes no sense do you mean ' My parents weren't home when i walked in?' I hurriedly . Is ...

“Go.” Kara said, “just go talk to him.” I turned to stare at her. whats going on is this a flash back? “I can’t do that.” I said, “look, he’s ...

It's good and has a good story line to it, although i wouldn't have written in like that. :? At the start i thougth you wrote it a bit childishly ...

I like the use of language here, although you could change some words around :) It was really good, i read it to my little brother. I love the way ...

you blew me away, I haven't heard a poem like that since i was younger, i love I'm a plexiglass window to another side of the world beutiful. If i ...

okay here it goes.... :) it's seriously good, although you should re read it, i was a tiny bit confused on what was going on, any who, you could have ...

I'm really getting in to this, truely amazing. You have just a couple of mistakes. Try and make this longer, did she do the test? Was it hard, or was ...

That was really emotinal. I loved this though you should describe luke. Is he tall? and when he says (“I..” He began,avoiding my eyes, “I mean, this can't..I don't feel ...

I really do like this but just a few changes could be made :/ School. Oh joy. It’s really sad, actually. My school, like I said earlier, is small. Super ...

Whao you blew my mind! This is amazing, I don't think i would change anything. :) My thoughts continued to stray away from their intended track You could change it ...

You did really well in this, I like the idea and you should continue. You do need to set a plot it would make it easier to write :) Don't ...