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Ooh i really like this :) I don't know anything about poems so i won't try and go all technical, but i can see that it's good :) :smt023

This is great, and i can't find anything wrong with it at all :D The story is fantastic and i love this line; He could not wait for it to ...

Oooh nice story seems to be developing here, interesting :) I should like to see how this develops... I blinked myself back to reality and scanned the flawless and only ...

I like this poem alot :) One thing i'd sugest is to put capital letters in there, but people have already said that, anyways... My favorite bit is this, as ...

This is a little too GARGH SERIOUS for me. Still it was good, but i didn't really get it. I like this bit, Compliments and love, Sprawled out in italics, ...

I very much like the idea of this :) As i like it when you mention your son at the end (That sounds as if you have a son; i ...

Aww i like this alot, it's so cute. ^^ And i was interested all the way through. Write more! We stopped, dead. Deader than the cow whose heart was in ...

Lizzy, i have been with you when you have recieved such comments, and they are all the same aren't they. I think this is a very British piece of writing ...

i love this story i hope youve put this half on bebo you should put the first half on here lizzypoo i can see a good storyline developing and such ...

Like a worm worm in two halves. mrs standerline always told us to write something..then watch tv or whatever.then go back to it and read again..then any mistakes will stand ...

I really like this story :) It's quite amusing hehe. There's one thing i'd say though, All he, Trevor, does is swim in circles and wait for the next time ...