santiesther

i worked on some of the things you recommended - thanks again

thank you so much! i'm so glad i'm reaching people with similar experiences, and this was very helpful.

also, cut those friends out! i promise you, from personal experience, it won't take long to find new people who will love and cherish you for who you are. and ...

wow, thank you so much. this story was definitely written from personal gut-punch experience, and i'm so glad that it had the same effect on someone outside of my head. ...

i'm going crazy that was still the wrong person. hopefully you understand it was a typo haha

General question for everyone who added to this thread - if I posted a second version of this story, would you critique it again? You've all been super helpful!

that last one was a typo, oh my god i can't believe I didnt' catch that haha. I meant to type casey, I must have been writing pretty late there. ...

i 100% agree, there were times that i struggled to fit the storm metaphor in with the story and i am still trying to work that out haha. thanks so ...

nitpicks are always helpful! thanks so much :)

thanks so much! glad you liked it, this was very helpful.

This might be a weird comparison, but in a strange way this story reminded me of "Of Mice and Men". However, only in the way that it was so impressively ...

Thank you so much! This was very helpful and I'm glad the metaphor was cohesive - I was worried it got a little too weird sometimes.