saily.kiwalkar

Hi! Honestly I'm hopelessly romantic. I loved your poem. I liked the second paragraph especially. I agree with zaneman. You can use the suggestion. Keep writing!

Hey! Welcome to YWS I think you need yo use punctuation marks. Without the use of punctuation the flow doesn't seem write. But otherwise the poem is really good. Keep ...

Hello, This is definitely a very good poem. I especially loved second paragraph. The flow of the poem is good. Keep writing!

Hi! Nice story. I agree the comment above. You have used 'patients' instead of 'patience'. I think that for the brother, the correct adjective would be 'spoilt' and not 'spoiled' ...

Hi! I liked this piece. It definitely looks interesting. I'm looking forward for the other chapters. I was so engrossed in reading that i couldn't pick up minor mistakes. Nice ...

Hi! This is real an awesome poem. The emotion of love and its soothing effect is really beautifully put in by you. Keep writing. I especially liked the last stanza. ...

Hi! I am Saily. I liked your poem. It has simplicity. You can definitely add more lines. It seems short to me. I liked the emotion being really sensitive... Try ...

Hi!!! I found this very beautiful. I don't have a clue about melody and stuff but the words are well put in! Keep writing!

Hey! Nice poem. i thought it was really harsh but heartfelt. Keep writing!

hi, welcome to YWS! nice story. i thought it was a bit long but the story is good. keep writing!