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I like to see that it's not your usual depressing stuff. It's pretty positive and that's increasingly harder to find in poetry. I don't like this part much: Every time ...

There is much obvious humor in this piece and it was entertaining for it. It is not my usual area of expertise so please, do not take everything to a ...

I suppose maybe I'm the odd one out, eh? I really liked the way it sounded in my head. For me, it happened to flow quite nicely. If these are ...

The ratio would generally go like this: Review 2 pieces of work ---------> You may submit 1 piece of work. When the site is operated like this, it works much ...

There is no rythym to this poem. I am certaintly not saying that poetry must rhyme but it should have some sort of flow to it. This is a very ...

Written like a true novel! It's original, with an excellent pace. The beginning is somewhat slow and it took me some time to grunge through. I'm talking about the dream ...

The beginning of this story sets a very lonely, sad mood and for this story, that is very good. But in the beginning, I also get the impression that Damien ...

From the beginning, the descriptive words you use pull the reader in. For one example: ...blushed a deep scarlet colour... It's so much better than just saying "she blushed". Some ...

Okay, I'll be real eccentric here. It is the words you used that first caught my attention, before reading it in standard form. For example; playground, candies, chocolate, tongue, burning. ...

Hahah. Okay dear, you've waited long enough. Now let's get down to business. Please know that, however close we are, I do not intend to spare your feelings. First you ...

It flows much like a poem would, though it is told in a narrative form. It sounds almost like a ballad when you read it aloud to yourself, seeming to ...

Well, I've only read part 1 at this time but I do plan to continue into it because I found part 1 extremely well written and intriguing. Who would have ...

It's a really nice start! Way to draw people in! The general being a woman is really nice because it's not what people would generally expect. I'm glad that you ...

I meant to send a reply to this much sooner than I now am but I did want to think about it for awhile and I'm glad I did. This ...

Darling, I think Snoink is quite right. There is a time to capatalize and a time to cool it. Though in poetry there is commonly not too many rules as ...