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this is fine stuff, i acctually enjoyed it.

i cant really add- hmm- most of the mistakes were small and over all , you entertained me , which is a supermegacompliment , cause afterall thats what every writer ...

I feel so , feminin - ehyaah! nAruto could kick her (MY) ass. Sharingan is lame. sususu *Post edited by Jennafina.

it was sharp and you translated your point well - but try connecting the sentences togethar , like at the start , you could of saidf " but the young ...

tea,i love that name , but the way table and tea were on the first sentence was odd , made me read it twice but any way - love it ...

I havent read annything like this before , in books too , and i dont believe your fifteen either. stop looking for compliments like these , write a book and ...

i dont really have annything to add to what myth said , exept she forget to complement you , this was immaculate , i liked it . Reminded me of ...

somthing happened and my story was doublled , sorry , im not really sure why it happened and i cant accsess it to delete it - hmm

I dont think punctuation or spelling is impotant , and if you havent read somthing properlly dont deal death to the writer , thanks for pointing it out though . ...