rodent

i liked it very much, if i could spell fabulus i would definitly use it here seriously though, your peice is very provokative, quite potent too, like having whisky in ...

this was incredibly strange , in fiction it felt very real , and the way you told it through emotionwas clever. I started oput thinking that she was his duaghter ...

you didnt right this. this is the recolection theory of Antony Hopkins . you are a thief. - only kidding , ehhehe one of the best things ive ever read ...

you have solid melody , but the diolog wasent realistic - youre using them as mouth peices - "Tamia, look. You were alone in the forest, with minimal provisions, and ...

yOU'VE GOT SOMTHING , BUT THE WAY YOU MAP OUT YOUR DIOLOG IS TERRIBLE , ITS SO FAKE aND ARTIFICIAL - AND WHAT GAVE IT AWAY FOR ME WAS THE ...

your insane . People dont post stuff like this , and thats why i cant help think your a bit bold . The acctual quality was , eh... it was ...

better than i expected , like jhone sawen's style - all aspects were good but not particuarily brilliant , the fact that you managed to create strong suspence and stronger ...

i liked it - seemes youve had alot of experience before coming here, It had a sense of tension from the first word- your description of fording bridge was very ...

I thought it was bloody good , dont worry bout spelling , it did have meaning and it did have aim , it explained half of someones life - the ...

Keep writing , me telling you your mistakes wont work , you'l find your litriture skills slowly develop over time , and your all ready on high ground , DO ...

This is what a story should be , simple and strait , from one point to another . I liked it , i like your language and how you describe ...

i loved it to bits and i want to read more , youre style is kind of like , hey-im-not-showing-off-how-much-vocabulary-i-know-but-i-can-make-a-very-nice-description, And what myth told you about 'sort

this is smart , its balanced and theres a real melody of words , i wouldent be suprised if i found this in a book , but , if this ...

I think your first paragraph is very poorly written , after that i could see where you were going , and i liked it . i didnt read all of ...

Its hard to work out whats going on , you described the actions and emotions good , but its not anchored in a reality , when i write i try ...