retrodisco666

Hey and welcome to YWS! The problem here is that it has been done a billion times before. It is a short single stanza with the same drained imagery. I ...

Hey, The Lyrics sounds like they should be sung by someone like Taylor Swift. They are quite good love-ish lyrics. No critisms for them, but at the same time, they ...

Hey, I was confused, the first chapter didn't seem post apocolyptic, but, the prologe did. The prolgue had me gripped and I wanted to read the rest of the book ...

Hey, I appeciate this is a summary, but it goes far too fast. You need to put the brakes on and add a little emotion. She just kissed him and ...

Hey, First off, it is hard to take seriously in how it's written. I'll give you an example. NAN: I thought you wouldn’t show up. HADLEY: Please, the only reason ...

Hey, Grade - a solid B. The reason I would not give it an A is because you punctuation is very repetive and drags a bit, where as, it should ...

Hey, I really want to find out about this now thanks to your poems. The best stanza, I think, is the last one. It has a very poingant message. However, ...

Hey, *Claps* The poems theme is very generic and cliché which has been done a thousand times before, however, I rather enjoyed this. It was quetioning it and contemplating the ...

Hey, right, content was good. My main flaw was that it was just one sentence. I was going light headed, joke. Add punctuation to aid flow and give the reader ...

Hey, out of that last I would go for in silence sin speaks the loudest. However, my personal favourite of yours is So maybe consider that one! ~Retro Disco666

Hey, You're right it is like Carol Ann Duffy - the two poems it reminded me of were Education for lesuire and Anne Hathway. However, I am also inclined that ...

Hey, I really like your idea, but the sentence structure is tedious. It is very simplistic similar sentences which make it difficult to read. If a person was to pick ...

Hey, They are good, but they would have to have the perfect tune or it just wouldn't work, and the tune would have to be so out there for people ...

Hey, I am a bit of a drama geek so it shall be honest, and slightly brutal. The first thing is that the characters are not real. Obviously they are ...

Hello, I'm here to review. The first thing i'd say is that, i'd break it up a bit more. As it is very daunting and a bit off putting, but ...