Published December 9, 2010
So, I really want to find one of my poems to enter the YWLJ 2011, but I need help. Below are links to a few of my poems that I think could get in. If you go through these I will give you points, or send you gifts, or do reviews for you if you have a poem you want to be reviewed. Please, I would greatly appreciate if you would tell me which one(s) you think might have a chance... If none, say that two... Or if you know another poem by me that you think could make it that isn't listed below, please tell me...
Thanks!!!
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=71436 ~ In Silence Sin Speaks the Loudest
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=72067 ~ To my dear "Friend" Writers Block
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=70088 ~ Daddy?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=65104~ Dancing With the Darkness
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=66976 ~ Ever Felt like me?
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=69750 ~ Sarah
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?t=68494~ Strawberries with Cream
I know it is a lot, but any help at all would be greatly appreciated!!!
If you dohelp, PM me if there is anything you would like in return,
~Rain~
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Hey there Rain, finally here to post my opinions on what you should pass. This is the last stage of my quest. XD After reviewing each, I'm finally here. LOL Okay:
1. It's too sad. Not really a fan of it... :p
2. This is nice.
3. Aww...this was the first poem I've read of you! Cool one, but no...
4. Great images, but repetitive, so no.
5. Too sad. O_o but has a universal teen theme.
6. This is very sweet. =)
7. YOU KNOW IT, I VOTE FOR THIS. HAHA
So...you know I already love the last poem. If I have to suggest, I say the last one. =D/ Just a few tweaks though. Now you have your opinion on what I think. =) So I clearly am biased with my vote, but guess what, the images in the last one were, I think, fresh. =D/ It has emotion, but not too sad. And the ending was really great! So, whatever you choose to pass for the journal, I hope you get in! =D/ See you round
~ JAsh ♥
Okay I read through all of them, and I think that the best of all is a tie between Dancing With the Darkness and Sarah. Dancing With the Darkness has a lot of imagery and a strong theme of depression and loneliness told beautifully throughout it, while Sarah is more about having hope and keeping strong, it's about struggling through hardships side by side. It's a close decision, but I think Sarah might have a better chance of getting into YWLJ 2011. However, I'd advise you to edit it a little in line with some reviews, and there are some things I'll point out to help in this aspect:
That should be one word. But then that's not important, because I feel all would fit better and more smoothly here.
I hope this helped!
Tiger
Hey,
out of that last I would go for in silence sin speaks the loudest.
However, my personal favourite of yours is viewtopic.php?t=65842 So maybe consider that one!
~Retro Disco666