retrodisco666

HELLO! I enjoyed your poem and I do agree a stronger ending is needed, but i'm not sure what yet . . . maybe i'll come back to it. I ...

Hello dear :) First of, this is beautiful. imagery and emotion perfect. (Yep I don't have to use the scales XD) But that would just be pointless saying that. The ...

Hello, Well it's good to see i am not the only one who can write a poem about cannabilism :D The imagery you have in here is great and very ...

HI! Personally, I think darker imagery is needed. You have the emotion and the anger and frustration, and some good description but id on't think it's dark enough, I think ...

Hi! I think everything you're saying is right but maybe once or twice you need to chose a character from either text and compare them in the way they create ...

Hello :) First comment is if you touch stanza one I will eat you. It is perfect, especially the italics line, it has such a good punch to it, questions ...

Bonjour! I do french, but i'm not sure to what degree I am compared to you, but I noticed somethings. it is mainly the feminie and masculine agreements. Par exemple! ...

Hello, This poem has thrown me. I love it. It is my ideal poem. I love the imagery, theme, content everything, but there is something not here. Yove made a ...

Hey! I remember reviewing this the first time around months and months ago!!!! :L Let me just say now it is in the Lyric catergory and shortened it makes a ...

Hey, This is the second piece of yours I've reviewed of yours and i've think i'm understanding your style. You write with a lot of emotion. It is jam packed ...

Hello! First I shall explain my technique, I review on content and refer to a poem as scales. The perfect poem has the perfect balance of imagery and emotion! Okay, ...

Hello! I think from your old piece it is a drastic improvement and you should be proud. However, the new version is very imagery based and very little punch is ...

Hey, It didn't really work for me, if i'm being honest Coral. It's down to your form. It is very stagnant. And jarrs throughout. A poem about idolising someone would ...

Hi! I'd like to say I really enjoyed reading it. However just saying that wouldn't help! You have a suPerb balance of imagery and emotion but there is not a ...

HEY! The first thing would be there is no punctuation, so personally, I would go through and add some. The other thing would be to add more stanza's as it ...