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This is kind of a nit picky thing to say but, you need to capitalize your "i"s.

This poem needs a lot of work, but it has the potential to be great if you fix the format and find another way to express your feeling instead of ...

They are super sad but I really think there serious situations make them very good...

the rythm in your poem is really good. Your poem has a lot of depth.

You have a very odd sense of humor and it shows. I think your story is very interesting and makes you wonder what will happen next.