reikann

Hello hello! Nice to see you again. I'm not sure what I've commented on before, so there may be repeats. The plot thickens! The pacing of this is going pretty ...

They change species on ranking up, hm? Video game logic. Ash's exuberance and free will seems poised to be a real issue. Getting some more fight scenes in, I see! ...

Chapter 5 Wait, the bad guys know that Fae only gets her powers once a week, and they attack her on that day anyway? Poor planning. Andy seems to consider ...

I must kick this off with an apology - I did not read the previous works before jumping into this one, and this is in bad form. But I will ...

Ah ha! The Zeno/Ash romance begins. He certainly sounds interested. The description of awakened Ash is the best piece of descriptive writing in this series so far. As an overall ...

Finally, I shall write a review for chapters one through five. Zeno is taking the video game logic well in stride. One would, given that it's all he remembers. Knowing ...

I am loving Faye's 'design' so far. Dae the Mimic, too, is a worthy addition to any dungeon. I'm interested in seeing all the minions grow up. The actions of ...

I found these last three chapters, if anything, an easy, light read. I'm condensing all my total feedback here, because the same advice applies overall. This work has potential. The ...

Hello! Perhaps I should not jump into this in the middle of it, but it's review day and despite the length, I read through it all. Having read this, I ...

To begin with! You quite clearly, from statements below, would like this to be treated like a poem, rather than as prose. This is difficult at first brush, because it ...

Well descriptive, well paced, and thoughtful, this piece did a stellar job transporting me to the seashore on the gentle days before a storm. The energy and passion of the ...

Greetings! I clicked on this because it had the word centaur in it, and have centaurs in it it did. The centaur reveal felt like a actually surprising plot twist. ...

Comments on the first memory/flashback! To begin with, you have a good sense of descriptive writing. I especially liked the 'thoughts of' segment in the first line. What distracts here ...

To me, this poem tastes. The running metaphor comparing what I assume is something akin to a drug addiction to love relies heavily on the sensations of taste and touch. ...

Yes, the King does come off as an eccentric here. Does Von wear his armor to bed? Did Cecily do the same with her dress? As nice a gesture as ...