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It was a disappointment to not see you elaborate further on your hook, the introduction of: "my mother’s skin is a crime." The fact that her gender, phenotype (she is ...

Captain Frazer had intended for him to be driven mad by the darkness and silence. Don't tell us, show us this by having Frazer tell this to his juniors. Another ...

I have not read the first chapter. Now that I've given you that heads up, let's get into the review. Why set it up in this way the introductory paragraph? ...

This is a poor portrayal of a sex worker. Do your research next time as Grandison said. It comes off as a parody with lines that are trying too hard ...

she shivered off the due of the night . What does that even mean? Due typically signifies a charge or cost. With this in mind, it still isn't clicking in ...

Yo, let's get down to it. It's early September. Give us some more description about the weather. Is it a tropical September with a temperate weather that lingers in the ...

Natsumi panted hard as she followed after the dark figure who swam through the forest like it was flat and clear. I understand that you mention moments later that she ...

The two first sentences of the story catch my attention. Natsumi shaking her head is directly followed by the trees rustling in unease almost as though there's a correlation between ...

The first paragraph comes off strong. Although I notice early on that when it comes to sentence structure variety and length -there isn't much going on. Every movement of his ...

What black magic is this? No reviews! I'm here to change that. With the first stanza, I struggle to envision air as blue. I know it's there for the sake ...

I applaud you, my good sir. This is absolutely magnificent. You set the scene in the most minimalistic style, simple, to the point -forget capitalization because poetry is serious business. ...

Tsk, first half of your opening stanza is smooth. A soft here and a sonorous bunch of s's balanced against a sharp question ending with a cool d. I loved ...

i have a tendency to scrutinise A potential beat before I put myself through the sheets The rest of the poem capitalizes the I. I assume this is a slip ...

unforgiving land How is the land unforgiving? You tell me unforgiving and I begin to think of extreme climates such as the frozen tundra of Alaska, the deserts of the ...

I agree with most of the points that catslikebooks2 makes: however, I disagree that this piece being too realistic is the downfall. What this story needs is a magnification of ...