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I really liked the was really emotional and touching.the emotions are very well-expresed through the poem.you have a great potential.But I also agree with would have been better if you ...

I quite agree with papernessa.the tone of the poem was good.but i didn't quite get what you are actually going to convey through the poem and you definitely need to ...

Well, it was indeed a good piece of work…………………I experienced the emotions that you tried to point out while reading it………………..moreover it was a very good and uncommon topic â

it was really a good poem...............but the line- "North Korean sneeze champions" didn't match with the whole poem................i wish u could put some other word in that place or exclude ...

it was a good try all over..............i'll advice you u pay a bit heed to your rhyming scheme........... the line-"the sun send sparkling light on the sea" -can be better ...