rainbowbubble

Loves it! I'm an Australian-bred Pakistani, and I know exactly how you feel. The media's potrayel of our race is discriminative, one shouldn't be judged because of that, as the ...

Heyy, This poem is alright, but it could use alot of work, take note of all the mispellings marked by StoryWeaver13 as poor grammer can turn off readers in an ...

MAADDY! and you say you can't do poetry? This is really good :D It has great imagery, and has a good flow, you should write more poems ;) -rainbowbubblex

smashles, i hate you! ;) joking! Love the poem! Great flow, and the rhyme works really well here, and the end leaves you on the edge of your seet :D ...

Once again blossom you've written a fantastic poem! Great story and concept behind it, and it paints a really good picture in the reader's mind. :D You've portayed the hardships ...

master writer class? hehe good times ;) i agree with the above reviews, but you did really well considering we only had 10-15mins, with the added pressure. Make sure you ...

wow! really well written, great symbolism, kinda scares me as well!, my only advice is not to over-use question marks, but they are effective :) other than that, it's awesome! ...