queerwritergal

Thank you so much for the suggestions, I wrote this very quickly for a slam and just never edited it. I certainly will take your advice, and finally put some ...

I really enjoyed this poem because it flowed together very well, as the word choice is solid throughout the poem. However, the number one problem with the writing was the ...

Thanks so much! Honestly, I'm the worst at punctuation, so your review really helped, so thanks. I used "we" or "us" or "our" cause it was a memoir piece for ...

Thank you so much!This is probably the only short short I've written with a title I'm happy with. I tried really hard to write down the dynamics between my sister ...

Thanks so much for the feedback! I think the poem reads weird cause its supposed to be spoken? Or maybe I just need to edit. But thanks so much!

This poem is more about me being anxious than shy, I wanted to talk and envied those who did. But its all good, this is my staple to read at ...

Of course! You're welcome

While both sound good, they kind of warp the meaning of the last lines, with the double negative. You could fit again between to and become so it reads like ...

Thanks so much! I was actually writing about my sister and I's relationship for a small memoir piece, but I've always wanted to expand not so sisterly sisters into fiction ...

You're not wrong for the purposeful repetition, hell, I'm totally guilty of it myself! I love repetitive word play, its just the word choice, again. It just doesn't flow, ya ...