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Re: Spark chapter one, part one
I don't usually do reviews like this, because they are long and tedious, but I really liked this chapter, and had a lot of specific things to say, so here ...
Dec 11, 2011 -
Re: My Son is Gay
I must confess that this is very well written and fluid. with just dialogue you manage to convay a lot of emotion, and that is a rare talent. given how ...
Dec 8, 2011 -
Re: The Picture Show (Part 1/4)
I liked this a lot. The way that sentences are worded gives the peice a very charming effect, and the premise is delightfully fresh. While there is nothing new under ...
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: The War Not Won
wow. this was quite well done. by acknowledging the societal norm of men being soldiers as a bias that most people have, you managed to deliver an eye opening message ...
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: Your Heart Belongs to Me (Part 1)
To begin with, the piece has beautiful diction and imagery. instead of just describing her hair as brown, you chose "mahogany". I was constantly impressed throughout the piece with how ...
Nov 24, 2011 -
Re: The Man and the Beast
A short and sweet opening. Several parts were somewhat confusing, but most of the peice was well done. It opens with an exciting scene, which is a good tactic for ...
Oct 8, 2011 -
Re: Tiny Little Adults (Title need revising. Open to suggestion)
If I had to use one adjective to describe this peice, I would probably go with "chilling". It was very well written, and had a refreshingly dark mood, but oftentimes ...
Aug 27, 2011 -
Re: Button Man's Jazz - Chapter One, Part One
this was pretty well done but there were a few instances that bugged me. granted, almost all of them are probably justifiable because of plot constraints, and other complications, but ...
Jun 17, 2011 -
Re: Button Man's Jazz - Prologue
good opening! It does a good job at grasping the attention of the reader, and urging him to read further. I particularly liked the description, which you have always been ...
Jun 17, 2011 -
Re: Deleted 11
I really did like this, particularly for two main reasons. First, your command of the english language is pretty impressive, as you were using words that I seldom remeber to ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Alone.
wow. Ok, that was pretty depressing. It was pretty well done however, as it must have been difficult to write from the perspective of a young child. In this respect ...
May 5, 2011 -
Re: Another Obnoxious Blade
I think this was very well done, and I certainly enjoyed reading it. I think the strongest thing about this piece is the unusual presentation. For instance, the inner debate ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Because I'm a Christian
I particularly enjoyed this poem. I'm sure you can guess why. Yep, I'm a Christian too! Anyone who is a Christian or has come into contact with them will be ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Lifewish: Chapter One
This was an enjoyable read, primarily because it was so dramatic. A lot of works can talk about combat and violence with little impact on the reader, but you managed ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Lifewish: Prologue
This was an interesting read, and I must say that I particularly liked the first paragraph or two. Switching on and off between the woman commenting on her and her ...
May 4, 2011
