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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: redacted

    Alright, I love your poem overall! It's refreshing to read something this well written. I love your word choice, and for the most part, the flow is great as well. ...

    Nov 20, 2011
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: David Echoe Short story

    Alright, so I noticed a few grammar mistakes: David looked at it but, it didn’t feel right. The comma should be afterit and before but (David looked at it, but ...

    Nov 20, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Red Carpenter

    I love the flow of this poem! I know from experience that it is hard to make a poem, especially on this subject, interesting, and to keep your readers attention, ...

    Nov 20, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: Freeing A Caged Bird (A Naruto Fan-Fic)- Chapter Three

    As always, great story. I LOVE how you portray your characters. They have very distinct personalities and they stick to those personalities throughout the story. I think you did a ...

    Nov 17, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: Freeing A Caged Bird (A Naruto Fan-Fic)- Chapter Two

    The story is awesome, I love how you describe your characters! For example, we learn about Kei's personality from some of kiba's comments instead of just from usual descriptions. Then ...

    Nov 17, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Cuts.

    Loved the story. Your language is great and it all flows very well. It is also quite vague, yet in a good way. It leaves the reader space to imagine ...

    Oct 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: Freeing A Caged Bird (A Naruto Fan-Fic)- Chapter One

    Alright, loved the story! I honestly couldn't find anything that I would change, although I don't know much about Naruto. I like how you jump right into things in the ...

    Oct 29, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: Starshine- Chapter One

    Hey i loved the story you have really good description, the only thing i noticed was that twice in the story you wrote that Murdoc "Was amused by her boldness" ...

    Jun 28, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: My First Date

    I love the story. I think in the beginning it takes a little while to get into the story but once it really started it had a good flow. I ...

    Jun 11, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Eyes of a Stranger- Part Two

    I absolutely LOVED the story but i noticed you wrote "same" instead of sam here and in another place shortly afterward. “How did you guys meet?” Same asked Other then ...

    Jun 10, 2011


“Hope” is the thing with feathers - That perches in the soul - And sings the tune without the words - And never stops - at all -
— Emily Dickinson