plutogirl

Here's a revision I took out some of the repition but there's still quiet a bit of it. Hope What happens when we lose hope? hope for a better tommorrow. ...

thanks for your help in a way i know your right about the change of mood but also it gets how i was feeling of complete hopelessness and anger and ...

wow that was awesome i don't know what else to say but wow :shock:

sounds like you know about as much as i do glad you liked it though i think

thanks kay glad you find it funny since you were my inspiration lol :lol:

glad you two enjoyed it, and nope i wasn't talking about you :wink: it was someone else

Thank you all for your advice as I said I'm going at this blindly so I'll take all the criticisms you have and come back asking for more. :D Here's ...

thanks for your help i didn't know how to break it up so i was just going at it blindly

I've loved all of her books that I've read, but my favorites that she wrote are The Hero and The Crown and The Blue Sword.

i think it's a good way to open i agree it leaves the reader in mystery but it also leaves you open to a lot of possibilites for the plot ...