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Re: When Secrets Spill
Hi! I liked this! Most of what I want to say is just to watch your tense. You changed from past tense to present tense then back again. I liked ...
Nov 14, 2016 -
Re: The Colour of a Streetlight (Part 1)
Hi! This was really, really good. I remember reading the version of this you uploaded a while back? I can safely say that I got sucked in both times. I'm ...
Sep 15, 2016 -
Re: Stolen Secrets: Chapter 1 Part 1
Hi! Radio here with a review! I thought this was a good piece and before I get to what I liked I'm gonna point out a few things. I think, ...
Aug 29, 2016 -
Re: Moonshine
Hi, I'm going to start out with what I like about this. -It's very poetic, the sentences flowed and it was very graceful. -There was a definite somber tone to ...
Aug 28, 2016 -
Re: The Colour of Bile
Hey, This is good but I have a small suggestion. Maybe you should add a little more into what the pov person about all of this? Maybe why they feel ...
Aug 28, 2016 -
Re: Withstand
Hi, ShadeMaster! This was intense and dark. I was enraptured from the very beginning. A few things to consider: To add to the emotion of the piece, try and shorten ...
Aug 28, 2016 -
Re: The Colour of a Street Light
Hi!! This is a super cool idea! I like how you left a lot of stuff to think and wonder on. That got me interested really quick. Are we going ...
Aug 27, 2016 -
Re: The Elite - Chapter 3 - Part 1
Hi!! I really, really like the way this story and these characters are building! The pace is great and the way you write action is awesome! I'm assuming we're gonna ...
Aug 25, 2016 -
Re: An Introduction to a Possible Novel?
Hey again! I really like where this is going! You left a lot open here for the reader to think on. I agree completely with everything Jenny said about this. ...
Aug 24, 2016 -
Re: Beyond Absence
Yo, it's ya boi Radio here again with another review! I like this because he has to deal with not being able to see, and you wrote that well. I ...
Aug 24, 2016 -
Re: The Unicorn
Hey, Radio here with a review! This was very good! I do have a couple things to say, though: I agree with felistia in that more senses other than sight ...
Aug 23, 2016 -
Re: Get it right
Hey, Radio here with a review! This was super cool, I really loved it! Right from the get go, I noticed the voice behind the character. She sounded cold and ...
Aug 23, 2016 -
Re: The Crossing
Yo, it's ya boi Radio here with a review! Overall this was pretty good! I got a strong western vibe from this? Is this supposed to be a western vibe ...
Aug 23, 2016