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I like it. It has a nice flow to it. teh last line seemed to make it fall apart. It works, but it could be better. Wow, I wish I'ld ...

Okay, um, I don't see what this means. It's a nice poem, but I don't know where your coming from. maybe I'm missing something.

Vamps right, It is for the girl I like.

I geuss your right. I wrote it for my sone to be girl friend, I think.

Thanks for everything. I right poetry to show my feelings and to relieve strees. I do it to help myself and also to show others where I'm coming from.

I like it. You need to add punctuation first before I can determine the flow. Do that and I shall return.

What everyone else said. Keep going, you seem to have potensal.

I think it's okay. It talks about something physical and has a basic meaning, but that seems about it. Like i said it's okay, but it is very basic to ...

Thank you Kyle, but there are problems like matt said.

I suck at this. I'll see what I can do. Thanks.

Stop it you guys. The poem my sound boring, but it is good. It talks about an experiance many of us can relate to.

I does pull through as a poem, but It can be better. I couldn't help unless I change the whole thing. PM me if you want help though, i'll try.

Thanks I'll keep it all in mind

I go with what Matt said. Poetry can be for fun, but it seems like you wont take it to heart.

Sorry, I take poetry to heart. That may be why I said that. That's just how I feel. It is only an oppinion.