penny

thanks so much guys, i really really appreciate it! this poem has special significance to me, so it really means a lot that you guys like it! i think that's ...

boundless i think definately works better...it's still kinda off though, but i can't really figure out what it is.

dashes! yes! lol. i completely dismissed them awhile ago. I wrote this poem this summer and i think the reason I used commas was because originally the poem didn't have ...

A as in...

alexis...i'm sure i'd know once you told she a character from your book? is she a name for someone else...or are we really talking about an alexis here...

honey is a very nice word, i don't blame you. it's one of those words that sounds exactly like what it means. it's a very sweet and thick and sticky ...

Hey bubblewrapped! I took your advice and changed the part about the shirt. I also changed part of the end from "the one you brought the red wine home in." ...

Yeah, the language definately added to the humor. You took a serious kind of diction and made it very funny. awesome. :wink: -penny

I really like the second half. The whole poem has a very unique rhythm. But the first half of it didn't really catch my attention. Depressing can be a good ...