paintingtherain97

This is a good story, though I've got a few suggestions if you want to improve it. For one thing, your tenses aren't very consistent. You keep alternating between past ...

I thought this was pretty good. You did have a few little grammar things you should go back and check, though. It seems a bit short to really be a ...

This is a nice little memoir, although a bit simplistic. If you want to add a little meat to it, maybe you should increase the details. For example, how did ...

This is a really good start. I like the melancholy tone you've set, also the way it seems to be told from memories, the character reminiscing about her dead friend. ...

This has the potential to be a good poem, but to be honest, the form needs a lot of work. You should keep it organized with lines and stanzas. Also, ...

This is amazing. The rhyme scheme is original and good. I didn't see any mistakes in grammar. The only thing is that the last line seems a bit bulky with ...

I love this. I've never actually read something that was written in the second-person form before this, and it's really unique and interesting. I like how you described the passage ...

I liked it. You should try to clear up the tenses a little bit because you kind of alternate between past and present. I like the way you described the ...

This isn't bad. The syllabic content is a bit unbalanced, and the story is a little bit labyrinthe. Other than that, though, it's clever and original and just really unique. ...

This poem rocks! People write way too many sappy romance things about sunsets and blah blah blah. But this is about something that matters, and there's an actual message and ...

I like the way this is told in story form instead of an essay type of thing. It's creative and makes it all the more interesting. I was actually thinking ...

This is good! It summarized well the absurdist ideas, as well as the main idea of the story. This is organized, grammatically well-done, and accurate. I liked it because it ...

I like this poem. It's unique and sort of riddled. I like your word choice and the rhythm of the whole thing. Unfortunately, there were a few basic errors and ...

This is okay. I liked the rhyming and the light, funny subject matter, although the grammar needs some work. All in all, it could be better and could be worse. ...

Nice song. I like the message about love, although this is kind of short and repetative. I think you should maybe add a few more lines or something so it ...