oneeyedunicornhunter

king, i know the story is vague. i never called my readers morons. and i did mention that i WAS in fact thinking about taking you guys' advice. your suggestion ...

what i literally meant by that line was that many people reject failure--the 'failure is not an option' mentality. 'games' really refers to 'wars'. that's it! all i was saying ...

'peaces' does make sense. surely if you realize that i was comparing wars to 'games', you would be able to make sense of the word 'peaces'. *sigh*...it's really quite frustrating ...

:D thanks for the Golden Star and compliments (especially the compliments). i'm impressed you understood what it was about. don't tell anyone! ;-) love your sig by the way. the ...

conrad rice...the MC was a man. :lol: alright, alright! you guys win. since nobody understands what the message of this story was (or even what's actually going on) i'm going ...

alright, i didn't finish, but i will later. if you're going to stick with present tense, STAY CONSISTENT. the beginning was all over the place.

haha! vernon, hate to break it to you, but when water falls on trees, it just MIGHT be described as pounding! ;-) thanks for the compliments, amber.

alright, i didn't want to, but i thought i'd bump this poem for three reasons: 1)i revised it a bit 2)i didn't get many reviews... 3)i will donate 50 points ...

ahhh i love riddles... but i have absolutely no idea what the answer to this one is.

alright, since your the second person to ask, i'll just say right here: no, i'm not writing more on this. i leave you here to wonder and speculate. not all ...

woah...i've heard of puppy love...but never kitten love! :lol:

oo, i haven't read any SW fanfic before. a tad sloppy, but i think everything was covered in previous comments. looking forward to more!

hmm. change NOTHING. haha, that's all the advice i have for this poem. and the carpet thing...genius. nice.

will do. but don't expect the rest for at least...i don't know...a month. at least. i have most of what i want to write scribbled down hastily, but i haven't ...

oh yeah thanks for reminding me: the rest is going in Advanced Critiques, once i finish it. i meant to say that when i posted this. thanks for your advice, ...