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Oh, I just realized that you posted this twice. I was so confused, I thought that my review had somehow gotten deleted. Best of luck with your story, let me ...

Hello! This was interesting, it definitely has some potential. What you really need to work on though is the amount of dialogue you have. There is just way too much ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS :) Honestly, I am thoroughly confused by what is going on here. Here's some things you really need to work on; first off, the story begins ...

Just when I thought it was impossible, it got even better!! I love the relationships and conversations between all of the characters. I also love how adorable this is, I ...

Hello! I absolutely loved this! It was brilliant. :) Every bit of it was completely realistic and believable. I could picture the entire thing happening as though it were a ...

Hello! I really enjoyed reading this, it easily kept my attention and I could picture everything that had happened. Some suggestions would be that you really don't need to say ...

Hello there, and welcome to YWS!! :) First off, I wanted to say that I enjoyed reading your story but I found a lot of grammatical errors, so here's this: ...

Hello! Due to the amount of reviews you already have acquired, I might not be any help, so I'll just tell you my general opinions on the piece: I thoroughly ...

Teehee, I'm happy to have inspired you!! :D I'm not much of a poet, so I'm not going to critique this. But, I will say that if my novel, We ...

Hello! This was really interesting and very believable! I enjoyed reading this. Some suggestions: The man, his clothing torn and ragged, walked into the Kmart. He idled eagerly shuffled his ...

Hello! I really enjoyed reading this :D I felt as though I could imagine everything that was happening vividly because of your descriptions. I like the friendship that the Lord ...

Hello! This was very, very interesting. I was definitely hooked within the first few paragraphs. The wine turned a blood red as the poison was pored into it. Placing the ...

Hello! I really loved this! It was very poetic and beautifully bittersweet. I like how it's so realistic, and you can easily relate to the main character. Also, this flowed ...

Hello! This was very intriguing, and very sad. But, I think that I agree with seems very rushed and it makes the reader have a hard time finding out if ...

Wow. This was - this was AMAZING! I really don't think that I'll be able to "tear it apart" like you wanted but I'll tell you what my thoughts on ...