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  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Silent Words

    I disagree with KevinL. For us who saw that show [it was a very,very good show] the background story is clear. It's lovely. I never really thought of the two ...

    Jul 7, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Deleted

    It was cute. Indid clice-ish, but cute. I never expected the boyfriend thing. Maybe you should learn more about the reactions people usually have to that, it could help. It ...

    Jul 7, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Reykjavik, Iceland

    This was very, very nice. I enjoyed reading it- something to clear my mind with. It was interesting and it included zero conversation and dramas. I think it was very ...

    Jul 6, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Cassidy

    I enjoy Cassidy's point of view! She's a very blunt, funny person. When she first said 'I do what I want and the rest of the world can go hang' ...

    Jul 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Parents-Prologue

    Nice story! It caught my eye, and I started reading! So, I didn't look for spelling or grammar mistakes to tell you the truth, it was interesting and sweet, and ...

    Jul 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Chapter 2, Lucy's side of the story

    The pen part was awesome! By the way, if she's in a small town like I think she is, then why don't people do a fund-raiser? That's what they always ...

    Jul 5, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Lilacs eyes (Chapter nine)

    Your first and second paragraphs are brilliant, let me just tell you that. Everything was. You said 'not perfect' did you? Sorry to disappoint you, but I believe that [at ...

    Jul 4, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: You're It (Chapter 3) *rewritten/edited*

    Okay, so, I was just wondering... not even one thought about Max? What's up with that? Not even a tiny thought about giving up on him now that she likes ...

    Jul 4, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: You're It (Chapter 2) *rewritten/edited*

    I love it!!! Now, just to make something clear, she can't just tell him straight away that she loves him! I'd suggest an awkward silence as the two of them ...

    Jul 3, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: You're It (Chapter 1) *rewritten/edited*

    Oh no! *squeaking* she's going to become popular and nasty, isn't she? And poor Kale is... oh no! Oh, damn *sniffling* and I was beginning to like her. I don't ...

    Jun 30, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: You're It (Preface)

    I must say I like your writing stay. Now, the way you describe the body is kind of telly. You could say that his *hair color* shone i the sunlight ...

    Jun 30, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Lilac's eyes (chapter eight) Part two

    You wrote Matt instead of Alex at the beginning. Other than that, change the ending to something with a more... rememberable sound to it. You can totally tell this is ...

    Jun 29, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Chapter 1. the concert

    I don't think the band's drug addiction is creepy. It fits the style. It just shows they're amatures still. Anywho, I think we do get a glimpse into what Kyle ...

    Jun 29, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Solace From The Shadows (Chapter 1)

    Cute meeting! You might want to add some commas, and what are we [the readers] to understand from her constant mumbling? That she's alone, without her brother, therefore filling the ...

    Jun 29, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Deleted (I dont know how to delete on this new design of YWS)

    Hahahahahahahaa!!! I couldn't stop laughing as I read it. As your average clutz, all of these scenerios had happened to me at least once. Nice going on the description of ...

    Jun 29, 2009


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