octocoffee

Hey! Thanks for replying to my thread. I hope you find this review helpful :) Isis tripped out of the doorway and jogged down the driveway, glancing both ways before ...

Hey fading-dream! This is an interesting poem :) If you don’t mind, I’m going to separate this into couplets and point out things that could be improved. Amongst the crowd, ...

Hi! I’m octocoffee, nice to meet you. I’d like to review your work :) So! Let’s go, shall we? My soul and heart dance in harmony to the sound of ...

Eli Danson and Hino (LAST NAME), an import from the Japanese national team, were the first to the center line. Why do you need the ‘(LAST NAME)’ there? Just to ...

Hey hen.hug! First of all, thank you for replying to my thread. I hope you find my review helpful, and forgive me if I come off as severe, it's just ...

Hey again Maki-chan! Sorry this one took a bit longer, I had work to do and whatnot in ‘real life’. Anyway, let’s go! (Oh, and about your response. If the ...

Konbanwa, Maki-chan! Hajimemashite. Ima, iku yo! (Ignore my silly Japanese. I’m a beginner, so I don’t know too much xD) “I am going to ask you a few simple questions ...

Hi RainWanderer! So usually I quote and correct, but your story is quite long so I couldn't. I'll try to point out the main things and let you go through ...

Before we start, I think you might want to slap an ‘R’ rating on here with a warning. Many young people frequent this forum, and some don’t like reading about ...

Hey ShaydeDesiree! For the most part, your spelling and grammar is great! But here's what I thought could be changed: Because it is not a “proper” name, they call me ...

Wow, this is great. I just have a few questions, I hope you don't mind. They're just tiny, miniscule things, really. The whole town was silent beside it, like children ...

Hey Mechi! Sorry about the lateness, but I’m here now! So, here we go. I look up. Cool air overwhelms me. The beach disappears, but the navy eyes remain. It ...

Through the graveyard I walk alone, No one stands by my side. I stop by a crumbling grave, My eyes cry my heart's remains. The rhythm here feels strange. In ...

Hi! I’m octo, and I noticed some things you might want to take a look at. As Galerius mentioned, this writing is very stagnant. There’s no variation, so there is ...

Thank you for writing this. As Mars said, it was an enlightening piece, thought-provoking and poignant. The writing style is straightforward and honest, and I appreciate it for that. Self-image ...