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Re: The invisible Piece (Love Poem Beware)
Hey Flower~Child! Long time no see! It's fantastic to see that you've been writing all this time, and it's been a while but I can tell your work has progressed ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Powerless
They eat away at my soul and scream; whisper; mutter; die... I think you should switch from semicolons to commas here. Semicolons create strange, awkward stops that doesn't work well ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: A Corrupted Angel (Working Title) Prologue
First off, I think that this a great prologue/introduction. Rather than just taking the beginning of a story and just calling it a “prologue”, we see that the novel to ...
Jan 22, 2011 -
Re: August's New Hope. Part 1.
Hi! I'm octo! I don't have quite a lot of time at the moment, but I wanted to stop by quickly and give you a review! The title kind of ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: Wilting Rose *100 Points to Every 200+ Word Review!*
I. Nitpicks “Oh.” She sighed. Usually, with these sorts of dialogue tags, there’s a comma rather than a period after ‘Oh’. “Thank you for dinner,” I asked. Doesn’t look like ...
Jul 3, 2010 -
Re: The Ultraviolet Catastrophe -- Summer Poetry 2010
I owe these a more proper review, but at the time, I'd like to say that your writing only grows more beautiful with the passing of time. You've always got ...
Jul 3, 2010 -
Re: Dakota's Diary, Chapter *New Edits 5/11/10*
Hullo, hullo! As I remember from the chat room, you wanted some reviews for this, so I decided to take up the challenge! I'm glad I did, as it's really ...
Jan 10, 2010 -
Re: FB Book 1 Ch 1 Part B
Hey dear! I'm sorry it took me so long to get to this, but I'm really sorry I have to drop a short review. The thing is, I have a ...
Jan 4, 2010 -
Re: Venolf War - Chapters 1 - 6
Hey afeefah :) Here it is, your long-pending review. When he left, it’d been about 6ish. Now it’s a quarter to seven. I’m not a big fan of the “6ish” ...
Jan 4, 2010 -
Re: Falling Apart Excerpt
Hey forestqueen! Thought I’d drop by the Romantic Fiction thread and I decided to review this. Hope I’m helpful. I stuttered, being in awe from his amazing blue eyes. Having ...
Nov 24, 2009 -
Re: Smash Bros. New Adventure Story (1st edition)
Hey Furuba! (Don’t mind if I call you that, do I?) Thank you so much for responding to my reviews thread :D I’ll do my best to help you out, ...
Nov 24, 2009 -
Re: And there was drum roll chapter 1 part 1
Hey! I’m so, so sorry for the belated review. But I won’t waste any time with petty excuses. Since a lot of people have reviewed, I won’t nitpick this to ...
Oct 4, 2009 -
Re: The Days of Innocence
Hey tnme! Thanks so much for asking for another review, I’m glad the last one was helpful. I’m sorry for the lateness, I’ve been absolutely swamped with work... (sigh) But ...
Sep 6, 2009 -
Re: Venolf War - Chapters 1 - 6
Hi afeefah! Nice to meet you! Thank you so much for replying to my thread, I’m sorry that it took a while to get to you. But let’s get started, ...
Aug 29, 2009 -
Re: Somalian guns
Hey Gabe! The title of this piece caught my eye and I thought I’d add a little of my input. I hope you don’t mind. An old white pickup pulls ...
Aug 15, 2009
