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For those lost souls, Death is hardest on the forgotten. For those lost souls, Time of pain, and weeping floods. For those lost souls, Inexorable time ticks no more. For ...

I think I chose weep because it is slightly more unusual than just "tears" and will stand out more and therefore emphasis the grief a little bit more. Thank you ...

Thanks very much for the advice. I definately think you are right about the structure!!

Hey... was wondering (as this was my first piece of poetry ever written) if there was any more tips, or advice or just any other thoughts on my poem... Thanks!

I'm so sorry. It must be hard to miss someone you love.I can always be your friend here if you want. Anyway, I liked the poem. It was sweet. And ...

I've actually had a problem recently about not being able to express my feelings to this girl, a girl that I think is perfect! This poem was excellent, and one ...

yeah I understand what you mean. But this was my entry in the "best ever death scene" competition. It was to not go over 700 words and we were told ...

Is this the first part? For it seems really unfinished. It also doesn't seem to have much of a plot, to be perfectly frank.

Thanks for the advice, you say it didn't seem rushed. But, I wrote it in like 20/30mins. So, I'm proud that it was well recieved. I'll review my punctuation before ...

That kept me very entertained.... and that's not an easy thing to do. Like many others have said it is certainly a unique concept. It was an interesting read and ...