neophilic

I liked it! I like the sort of feeling it gave, you created the atmosphere quite well =] I didn't like the second to last stanza though, it seemed a ...

I liked the feeling in this poem. I could almost see the park you were walking through, the imagery was pretty good. The roads are filled with people, walking past ...

I loved it, seriously amazing. I agree with lozzen, you calling her 'girl' makes it seem a little more personal somehow. I'm guessing the Camel part is an inside sort ...

Wow, I loved this piece. The imagery is astounding, really. And I’ll count blessings like calories, because optimism’s in my blood, and my cells can’t cope with sincerity like they ...

I loved the anger and feeling in this piece, and it was well-written, but it still needs a lot of revising. I dug my arm with my nails, Pulling hard ...

I love the image I get while reading this poem! It's so simple and sweet, and changes quite quickly in the last stanza. First of all, the tenses confused me ...

As many commenters above have said, the repetition doesn't work very well with the poem. I like the meaning you're trying to get across- but I also agree with singing_hope. ...