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Re: The Great Test of Faith -- Chapter One
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! I haven't reviewed in a while, so I may be rusty. I shall try my best! I like that you started it off with a letter, which ...
Sep 21, 2011 -
Re: I Am The Mockingjay ( Second Chapter )
Hi! I hope my suggestions help. This part was a little better than the first. It has a more action and explanation, but I don't think it's enough. If they ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: I Am The Mockingjay ( Prologue and First chapter )
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! I love the Hunger Games, so I hope my suggestions help! Overall, I thought it was fine. Not much is happening at the beginning, though. It has ...
Apr 22, 2011 -
Re: Hunger Games
Josh Hutcherson [Bridge to Terabithia, Journey to the Center of the Earth, etc.] is playing Peeta. And Liam Hemsworth [The Last Song] is playing Gale. That's all they have so ...
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: Mechanoids (Prologue & part of Chap. 1)
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! This was a very interesting piece. I liked the idea of the Mechanoids; they seem cool. I like your descritptions, especially of the pain. You didn't just ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Tales of Lemeria: Chapter 1: Wake Up
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! First, great job! I really liked this. :) It was really fast paced that kept me reading and wanting to know what happened next. Also, the way ...
Dec 14, 2010 -
Re: Racing to Death~Chapter Two
Hi! Narniafreak here to review! Well, I like that we get to see the "other side" so to speak, of the story. It lets the readers know that the real ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: The Bucket List - Prologue
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! Wow. This kind of blew me away. I really felt the pain Amelia felt. And I kind of felt sad because of her predicament. It's a fantastic ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: Racing to Death~Chapter 1
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! I hope my review can help. First, I did read the prologue and was very interested in this story. And this part helps set up what's about ...
Nov 19, 2010 -
Re: Ry Stormdragon (Chapters 1 & 2)
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! I hope this review helps! I was running as fast as I could. I wasn’t just going to let them kill me. I tried to stay quite, ...
Nov 17, 2010 -
Re: The Lost Star System part 3
Hi! Okay here I go. I liked most of the dream. It could use some more detail and action. You give a little too much away about Greg though in ...
Jul 9, 2010 -
Re: The Lost Star System part 2
Hi! I'm back to do another review! I hope this helps! It was very interesting back story to the vultrinos. It let's readers know how the bad guys feel which ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: The Lost Star System
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! THE END?! It can't be the end! He's almost escaped! He has the chip! Everything is going great, how can it be the end? What is the ...
Jul 7, 2010 -
Re: District XIII - Prologue
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! First, I saw this and was like "hunger games? AHHH! I love those books!" Okay. This leaves me with many questions however. I like how you incorporate ...
Jun 20, 2010 -
Re: The Forgottens
Hi! I'm Narniafreak! Wow, this was really interesting. It really caught me and I even ignored my friends new message on Facebook for a few minutes to finish it. The ...
Jun 12, 2010
