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Re: Sun Chaser
This is an amazing story and I loved the ending, it was very deep and thoughtful. The whole story had me captivated especially the ending. You had a minor spelling ...
Oct 11, 2013 -
Re: Fear
The first paragraph was more toward the fictional kind and at first I thought, 'okay, cool, creept eyes, yup'. And then it got more scientific and then I was like, ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: words
I love your description of words, it was very thorough and meaningful. I also liked the depth in this, it feels like you put thought into your poem. You haver ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: Lost
For some reason, I like these mysterious poems, where you don't know why, just now. I was taught that when writing a poem you put a capital letter for every ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: The Pack - Chapter Two - Kaat
Amazing, once again. I like how everything is so... real and you can relate to the story. What I want to know is what happened between the two chapters. First, ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: The Pack- Chapter One- Wolfe
When I saw the title I was like awww... I wanted to do something on a pack. And then I read the story and I was like WOW HOW DO ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: Return Of The Unwanted Dead. Chapter 4
'This time I am sparing you but remember next time I see you people lurking around here or anywhere else straight away suspension' He walked away angrily. 'Phew! We are ...
Sep 13, 2013 -
Re: Where Were You
when those people tried, to kill us all, and then they died? I don't really understand that line, people trying to kill and dying? It could have been written clearer. ...
Sep 12, 2013 -
Re: Lady of the Mists
This poem is really well written, I enjoyed the visualisation that I got from this. It was very beautiful and serene. I suggest you keep writing, that air of mysterious ...
Sep 12, 2013 -
Re: Return Of The Unwanted Dead. Chapter 1 & 2
From reading this, I thought that this was a rough draft. Your sentences don't flow, they are rather jagged and broken when you think about it. I think you should ...
Sep 12, 2013
